Hey Man,

That's good stuff there. Pretty strong anatomy, and easy to follow story telling. The perspective is kinka confusing in panel 2.

But most importantly, if these are submissions to get work with a comic book company you DO NOT want the word balloons in your submission, or any text at all.

Editors want to see that you can tell a story without any explanation, text or otherwise.

Also if you're looking to draw the books you want to submit just your pencils. There are artists that do ink their own pencils, but you don't see it that often. And the artists who do ink their own pencils typically have mind blowing, or very unique inks that couldn't be replicated by anyone else(take a look at Scottie Young: [link])

Good luck man!

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We're too lost,
to lose hope

Thanks for the info.

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I'd rather sleep my whole life away than have you keep me from dreaming.

Great job.

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"There are two kinds of Mandalorian Warriors, Jarael. The ones who figure out how to use their medkits-and the ones we bury." - Rohlan Dyre

holy snotballs!!! this is sooo much fun to read!!! the art is as amazing as the story!!! i have never found such a fun KOTOR comic before! it actualy has a plot!!! and its not a romance!!!!yay!! i cannot wait for the next part!!!!

does it have to be the last page? It's soooo good!!

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"I am Darth Revan Dark Lord of the Sith"--Revan
"The only ones who should kill are those who are prepared to be killed!"--Zero

Revan's Life Record: Prologue: [link]

Are you working on anymore issues for this or are you stopping here?

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I've seen his heart, and I know how empty it is. I've seen his anger, and I know how deep it is. I've seen his ambition, and I know how ruthless it is.

That's it for this- for now. I've sent it out to a few companies, and I'll be showing it at ConnectiCon in a few weeks to try to break into the industry.

Right now I'm working on a gigantic fantasy epic that, trust me, is ridiculously awesome. So please stay tuned for that.

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I'd rather sleep my whole life away than have you keep me from dreaming.

Holy. Flippin. Cow.

I just read this whole story from the beginning, and instead of clogging your inbox with seperate comments for each peice, I'll sum it all up here.

I love how you merged the two Knights of the Old Republic stories together so seamlessly, it now seems to come full circle.

The way you portrayed the usually invsible aspects of the force is brilliant I really do believe that Revan was becoming a conduit of the Dark Side and was ready to really whoop Sion's butt.

Some of the perspectives you drew looked a little awkward, but all in all: BLOODY BRILLIANT!

I do hope you get into the comic business.

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...and then the universe exploded!

Very, very cool how you descrive Kreyas blind eyes, Sions destroyed body (in the beginning, i think the rest came from other battles ^^)
Very cool.